kratos ~ back and better than ever (Censor avoidance)

2007-04-22 06:20:27 pm

:D i am back and did some studying whilst i was gone ^^'

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ARE WE FREE!?!?!?

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Peolpe push the limits
Say i can't speak
For my opinion is mine
And it was wrong?
I spoke my plight
You feed me your shit
I have no voice?
HOW! NO! i wont let you!

Will you press my BUTTONS?!?!
Put me on ice?
Cold as the Anartic winds!
Save you remorse...
Pitiful words!
For the weak of heart,
Remember "Freedom"
Call for your republic!

Ensalved by my thoughts,
Malevolence!
Remove these Binds and Shackles..
To move on 'forward',
Only rolling back..
Reach forward toward you
Will you help me...
Addictions labeled "Freedom"

Target on my backside
Conquer the forth
Express myself through myself
Marked heretic
Cause i dont beleive
Do i CARE? NO CHANCE!!!!
Shit...Damnation?
You can burn WITH me in HELL!

You need to censor me!
i hold the secret?
Halfassed inconsistances...
Marching forthwhence
Do YOU feel it!?!?
Could you if you WANTED?
Seeing with your eyes...
You are blind to a fault.

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My spelling still needs inprovement but oh well xD baby steps, ya know :s

MOD EDIT: Uncensored "shit".

Thread title:

:D i am back and did some studying whilst i was gone ^^'

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ARE WE FREE!?!?!?

6
4
7
4
4
5
4
6

Peolpe push the limits
Say i can't speak
For my opinion is mine
And it was wrong?
I spoke my plight
You feed me your sh[i][/i]it
I have no voice?
HOW! NO! i wont let you!

Will you press my BUTTONS?!?!
Put me on ice?
Cold as the Anartic winds!
Save you remorse...
Pitiful words!
For the weak of heart,
Remember "Freedom"
Call for your republic!

Ensalved by my thoughts,
Malevolence!
Remove these Binds and Shackles..
To move on 'forward',
Only rolling back..
Reach forward toward you
Will you help me...
Addictions labeled "Freedom"

Target on my backside
Conquer the forth
Express myself through myself
Marked heretic
Cause i dont beleive
Do i CARE? NO CHANCE!!!!
Sh[i][/i]it...Damnation?
You can burn WITH me in HELL!

You need to censor me!
i hold the secret?
Halfassed inconsistances...
Marching forthwhence
Do YOU feel it!?!?
Could you if you WANTED?
Seeing with your eyes...
You are blind to a fault.

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My spelling still needs inprovement but oh well xD baby steps, ya know :s

MOD EDIT:  Uncensored "sh[i][/i]it".

Kratos

2007-04-28 03:18:47 am

So yea, i'm going to put my best foot forward, and put more stuff on here, since i got no feedback i'll take that as a positive :D

http://www.metroid2002.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=5251&highlight=

And since my ego is a giant balloon, and i assumed ya'll remembered me from way back when, i figure i may remind you D:

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{Everyone tells me this feels random to them, but i like it}

More From My Head

Angels
Seraphim
Life
Love

Misfits
Metalhead
Live
Hate

Cliche
Everything
Wishes
Pride

Trouble
Teenagers
Call
Kill

People
Disgraceful
Blame
Beat

Callious
Dangerous
Man's
Mind

Banish
Abandend
Stress
Numb

Betrayed
Forgotten
Lashed
Bruised

Wisdom
Ignorance
Slave
Caged

13M13

2007-04-28 07:02:55 am

l'appel du vide

Kratos

2007-04-28 09:33:51 pm

Thanks for that....

arkarian

2007-04-29 11:11:34 pm

red chamber dream

No, sir-- thank you.

Kratos

2007-04-29 11:22:04 pm

o.0 alright someone say something positive or negative before i start pulling hair 0.o

SABERinBLUE

2007-04-30 01:30:36 am

Cook of the Sea

Do you want the honest version or the nice version?

JaggerG

2007-04-30 03:40:25 am

Shifty Leader

That M2k2 guy

The funnier version, please.

mooseproduce

2007-04-30 02:54:10 pm

Quote from SABERinBLUE:

Do you want the honest version or the nice version?

The awesome version. I can't wait.

arkarian

2007-04-30 06:31:37 pm

red chamber dream

Writing random groups of words is generally not poetry.

... is that what you had in mind in terms of criticism?

Kratos

2007-04-30 10:00:19 pm

Works for me, not gunna flip out this time XP, but was that a general statement, or aimed at one in particular? As to try and improve, and if you don't mind, am i on the way, walking backwards, or standing still?

BioSpark

2007-04-30 10:23:28 pm

Falling.

SABERinBLUE

2007-05-01 05:09:53 am

Cook of the Sea

Quote from Kratos:

Works for me, not gunna flip out this time XP, but was that a general statement, or aimed at one in particular? As to try and improve, and if you don't mind, am i on the way, walking backwards, or standing still?

Here's a super pro tip: if your poetry is best read out loud at scream volume, it's not poetry.

This is what I got from that first one there:

"I hold the answers to everything but THE MAN KEEPS ME DOWN BECAUSE SOCIETY SUCKS"

Seriously dude. That's lower than Livejournal crap. And what was going through your head when you decided to end no less then three of your lines with "?!?!"? This stuff can barely be classified as poetry. It reads as, and likely is, just the emo exudings of the mind of a teenager in search of himself.

JaggerG

2007-05-01 06:34:24 am

Shifty Leader

That M2k2 guy

Quote from SABERinBLUE:

It reads as, and likely is, just the emo exudings of the mind of a teenager in search of himself.

Ahh, good times. Except for the pseudo-suicide and depression part.

mooseproduce

2007-05-01 08:35:04 am

If "forthwhence" isn't a word, it should be. ^___^

Amani

2007-05-01 09:19:02 am

Oh man, "forthwhence". Reminds me of a Swedish rap from '99 (that seriously pwnz). So many planned contradictions in the imagery along with religious references you kind of have to relate to it whether you've experienced it or not. It's just really good. I should translate it.

Blues - Mardröm (means "nightmare")

Sample. It cuts twice.

13M13

2007-05-01 10:02:18 am

l'appel du vide

Also, you might want to privatize your bucket.

Kratos

2007-05-01 07:20:31 pm

i'm 90% sure, forthwhence, is a word, but anywho...thanks for the input, i was really thinking that ya'll would shun me cause i was an ass before, i really appreciate the help :D if it's worth doing, it's worth doing right.

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i'll see what i got stashed away, that isn't scream level. ^_^

arkarian

2007-05-01 07:44:57 pm

red chamber dream

"Forthwhence" is not a word.

nate

2007-05-01 09:28:14 pm

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/forthwhence

13M13

2007-05-02 11:29:14 am

l'appel du vide

Hah.

Kratos

2007-05-02 02:10:14 pm

i wrote these two for English not to long ago :D

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All around me,
it wraps, to surround all
everything moves in -
waves abound.
Lyrics embrace!
their in sites,
slumber deep inside me...
streamline it like heroin
withdrawn from it all.
Up and down
with its beat
Dwells out
for all to see
Scream and Shout.
Laugh and Cry.
Sing to the beat.
Or off-key accopella!

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A four letter word
Tossed around
Like a ball
in a game.
Does it even
Mean anymore?
Feel with what?
That can not
be right...
Red as a beat,
i walk away flusted...
All i ever knew.
Ever was...
An embrace.

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First one was something that's important to you, and obviously, i choose music. Second one was supposed to be about an emotion, and it was supposed to be about love, but as par usual, it came out unspecific and jumbled D: but ah well.

SABERinBLUE

2007-05-02 03:46:00 pm

Cook of the Sea

Okay man, you really need to run your stuff through a spell check now.

arkarian

2007-05-02 03:52:50 pm

red chamber dream

Nah, what he really needs to focus on is making sense. Spelling comes later.

Hejira

2007-05-02 07:32:21 pm

Yeah, 'love' wasn't the four letter word that came to mind. laugh new

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their in sites,