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Something I want to do when done with College and Uni etc is make my own games. I have one I'm designing called Legacy of Numach. To get the story straight I'm writing it out in novel type format. This is the first bit of it.

Legacy of Numach: Genesis

Genesis… A suitable name for this story. It’s the word used for the first book of the Bible, a book about how the world was created out of nothing. A suitable name as I was created out of nothing. I wasn’t born, but engineered. I’d give you my name, but I don’t have one. This is my legacy, the Legacy of Numach.

Over 4000yrs ago there was a race of humans that were highly intelligent, much more so than the Greeks or Egyptians or Incans. These humans were so advanced that the genetic code was like modellers clay in their hands, they had found a way to mix or splice the DNA of a human with that of other creatures. One such chosen creature was called a Chameodragon. It was a powerful beast, a warm blooded reptilian that could rend a man limb from limb. Long bone blades extended from its elbows and voracious bone claws allowed it to tear its prey apart, while its external ribcage and thick boning made it almost impossible to injure let alone kill it. That not being enough this beast had highly developed wings allowing for full movement in the air and adding further insult to the injury it could cause was its ability to blend in with its environment becoming almost unseen to the human eye. It was a horrific monster, exactly why it was chosen for splicing.
Using the DNA of this monster the people were able to create powerful warriors that were stronger and faster than any human could ever hope to be. They had all the strengths of this beast yet they retained their own individual thoughts and desires. These hybrids were called Numachians.
However they were not going to be left to mess with humanity for long. At some point later a disaster struck the world, wiping out this race and all their experimentation along with everything else on the planet leaving but a few. Or so it was thought.

May 17th 1972 a young intrepid biochemist by the name of Vincent Price, an ambitious man with the beliefs that man will one day be able to modify his own DNA and that the people of the past may have held the key, during an archaeological dig trying to support his theory came across a strange bronze tablet with unusual writings on it. This tablet dated back over 4000yrs! The writing on the tablet was translated; the writing was the remnants of the ancient races research. Vincent had struck it big. By using the information gained from the tablet he was able to form the world’s largest genetic research company – Biocon Industries. These tablets however didn’t have just their research but a sample of Chameodragon DNA…

Vincent’s plan was to use their research to create a Numachian to sell it to the military as a weapon. The problem he had though was that Numachians aren’t exactly ‘easy’ to hide, their green-pigmented skin, wings and external carapace generally gave away that they weren’t normal people. Nothing more than a minor setback to him though, he encoded into the prototype’s DNA the ability to activate and deactivate the ‘biomorphs’ as they are called, at will. This would allow the Numachian to change from a normal looking human into a complete Numachian and back again something the originals didn’t have. A very powerful weapon this would be indeed.

Vincent however didn’t anticipate his prototype rejecting its own creation and hating those who created him. The prototype rebelled and escaped Biocon, left with nothing but a burning hatred of Vincent and Biocon and a desire to seek vengeance on those who had mutilated him. How ironic that he wanted to create the ultimate weapon and succeeded, now that weapon is pointed right at him. Vincent now seeks to destroy the prototype, well have I got news for him.

I am the prototype, I am Numach and I’m not going down without one hell of a fight!


I have updated it since but don't have it with me so ur just gonna have to deal with a slightly older version :P

Let me know wot u think
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Ready and willing.
Well... it's a bit of a waste, unless there's some serious plot twists and turns (which there could be, I can't see your mind). (Let's see... this will be annoying without a name for the speaker... so I'll call him Mewtwo. Enough parallels there.) The story's great, right until the second to last paragraph. You give a lot of detail before, but right then it just sort says, "oh yeah, Mewtwo didn't like being so he's gonna kill stuff." I can see the story going that way, but it just sort of... happens in your narrative. There's no details at all, and even though the topic is a bit used it's not enough of an auto-response to just skip, especially when this is obviously going to be the player character. Plus, it makes him sound exteremely single-minded, but that doesn't fit at all with the tone of his narrative. Lack of plot doesn't hurt a game much, but an aborted plot will.
I have worked on that section a bit and expanded on it, what you read there was my first draft I didn't have my updated version on me at the time.

Pretty much the main character (Numach) is gonna be a kind of anti-hero. He is the good guy, but not necessarily good. His goal is vengeance, to annihilate biocon totally. As the game progresses he'll become more and more consumed with hatred (tho this won't last forever)

Near the end he'll fight a really evil guy but won't be able to harm him. "Evil can't harm evil" is a line gonna be used by the bad guy.

If anyone played FFII the dark knight couldn't harm any of the undead, but when he became a paladin he smashed them. Similar parallel here, whilst driven by hatred Numach can't harm the bad guy.

Won't go give too much info on he gets around this cus it'll spoil it.