Agoraphobic Coma-Inducing Insanity

2006-07-07 10:53:03 am

this is where i would post, well what have been called poems, but i think poem is a bit "fluffy" or "soft", but ya is this the right place?

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SABERinBLUE

2006-07-07 11:03:11 am

Cook of the Sea

Go for it. I'm not saying I'll look because that doesn't seem to be my thing, but this would be the place.

Kratos

2006-07-07 11:11:59 am

I'd like to say my writing are a blend of Slipknot's "People = Shit" and Stone Sour's "Bother", but my opinion doesn't matter. I also tihnk it is the right think to do in telling ya'll of my history, because it influences me greatly. I am growing up in an abusive household, gave seven years of my life to being rejected/rejecting the general public (done my self a favor really at that point), gave three years to a girl I "loved" to be cheated on and find out on my B-Day. I'm am Clincally Depressed, Manic (Bi-Polar), and have a slight case of OCD. I can't control my anger which usually ends baddly and leads to emotional outbreaks because i keep my emotions inward.

SABERinBLUE

2006-07-07 11:28:56 am

Cook of the Sea

As far as I know, "People = gunship" was pretty well established in the Bible.

mangadood

2006-07-07 12:32:10 pm

Too many fangirls to count

Bah, we had a chance, but the fools ate the apples.

arkarian

2006-07-07 04:08:16 pm

red chamber dream

Just post the poems, please.

Kratos

2006-07-10 02:12:51 pm

not a patient bunch huh.
o well this of the top of my head but....
_____________________________________________________

Transinding the Clouds

Standing in a corner
staring at the moon
wishing for a gift
a gift of nevermore
for The Raven said it first
i pray to him for sin

Trolling in my room
watching the lights glimmer
caring not of this
self-inflicted display
of terror and torment
with tears of red and black

"Adam's Song" blaring
knives polished nice
wrists at my side
i cut away my pain
to afriad to die
but to manic to live

Lift myself off the ground
clutching my cure tight
slipping away from this
casting away my filth
dispising all that live
without this thirst
a craving for destrution
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- by the way whats with this stuff
"Bah, we had a chance, but the fools ate the apples."
and
"As far as I know, "People = gunship" was pretty well established in the Bible."

Evil or Very Mad

There is a censor on this site isn't there :x

not a patient bunch huh.
o well this of the top of my head but....
_____________________________________________________

Transinding the Clouds

Standing in a corner
staring at the moon
wishing for a gift
a gift of nevermore
for The Raven said it first
i pray to him for sin

Trolling in my room
watching the lights glimmer
caring not of this
self-inflicted display
of terror and torment
with tears of red and black

"Adam's Song" blaring
knives polished nice
wrists at my side
i cut away my pain
to afriad to die
but to manic to live

Lift myself off the ground
clutching my cure tight
slipping away from this
casting away my filth
dispising all that live
without this thirst
a craving for destrution 
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- by the way whats with this stuff
"Bah, we had a chance, but the fools ate the apples."
and
"As far as I know, "People = gunship" was pretty well established in the Bible."

:evil: There is a censor on this site isn't there  :x

Chanoire

2006-07-10 02:36:51 pm

Quote from Kratos:

There is a censor on this site isn't there :x

You didn't read the rules, did you... the existence of the censor is pretty clearly stated in them.

Kratos

2006-07-10 02:47:00 pm

no, no i didn't
Embarassed

Izo

2006-07-10 03:01:06 pm

soaking through

Uhm, before you write poetry, learn to use the language you're writing in effectively. Honestly, you can't write a half decent poem without knowing the use of "to" and "too", or knowing how to spell "transcending".

Kratos

2006-07-10 03:20:04 pm

i spent a whole five minutes on that do you think everything/everyone is perfect. it is people like you that erode the already low collective IQ of this crazy world. NOTHING IS PERFECT. Just think if everything was perfect you'd have nothing to pick at and that would be sad, you couldn't look like a douche anymore. Perfectionism is a mental disorder did you know that. So i hope next time you will think more carefully when you piont out flaws when you have your own (not perfectionism before you try to cut me down saying you not a perfectist), but you know what your issues are and we don't need do disscuse them or argue either. I just thought i would piont out the fact your a hipocrite, because your a flawed being pionting out flaws in others.

SABERinBLUE

2006-07-10 03:25:17 pm

Cook of the Sea

Dude, you're trying to tell people how bad the world is with your poetry. And you're doing this using words. How do you expect to get the message across if you can't be bothered to spell your words correctly?

Besides, it's not like if you had spelled everything right the poem would be perfect. Oh no. Not by a long shot.

Izo

2006-07-10 03:30:47 pm

soaking through

Quote from Kratos:

i spent a whole five minutes on that do you think everything/everyone is perfect. it is people like you that erode the already low collective IQ of this crazy world. NOTHING IS PERFECT. Just think if everything was perfect you'd have nothing to pick at and that would be sad, you couldn't look like a douche anymore. Perfectionism is a mental disorder did you know that. So i hope next time you will think more carefully when you piont out flaws when you have your own (not perfectionism before you try to cut me down saying you not a perfectist), but you know what your issues are and we don't need do disscuse them or argue either. I just thought i would piont out the fact your a hipocrite, because your a flawed being pionting out flaws in others.

You do realise that you're pointing out my flaws in this post, yeah?

Chanoire

2006-07-10 07:42:28 pm

What an interesting usage of the word trolling. I wonder which of these meanings was intended?

The action of the verb TROLL in its various senses.

I. 1. a. Rolling, revolution.
c1440 Promp. Parv. 503/1 Trollynge, or rollynge, volucio. 1613 DAY Dyall v. (1614) 98 Concerning the Heavens they perceived such aequabilitie of motion, such turning and trolling of them.

b. ‘Rolling’ or ‘streaming’ in; abundant influx. Obs.
1614 T. ADAMS in Spurgeon Treas. Dav. Ps. xiv. 1 Extortion batters in the usurer's affections by the trolling in of his moneys.

II. 2. Singing in the manner of a round, or in a jovial style; in quots. applied contemptuously to antiphonal singing.
1575 Brieff Disc. Troubles Franckford (1846) 206 The trollinge and descantinge of the Psalmes. 1586 in Neal Hist. Purit. (1732) I. 480 The service of God is grievously abused by..ringing and trowling of psalms from one side of the Choir to another.

III. 3. Angling. The action or practice of fishing by the methods described s.v. TROLL v. 13.
But in trolling-line (quot. 1888 in 4), app. confused with trawling; cf. TRAWLING, TRAWL-NET, TROLLNET.
1651-7 T. BARKER Art of Angling (1820) 22 The manner of his trouling was with a hasell rod. 1682 [see TROLLER 2]. 1725 T. TAYLOR in Portland Papers VI. (Hist. MSS. Comm.) 88 The late Duke..took great delight in that kind of fishing for them [pike] which is termed ‘trowling’. 1787 BEST Angling (ed. 2) 43 The walking bait is that which the fisher attends to himself, and is called trowling. 1860 G. H. K. Vac. Tour. 167 If you..will go and spin a butterfish for lythe,..you will there first discover what sport trolling can be. 1888 GOODE Amer. Fishes 62 In trolling from a boat at least 300 feet of line should be used. 1910 H. T. SHERINGHAM in Encycl. Brit. II. 28/2 The use of the drop-minnow, which is trolling on a lesser scale.

4. attrib. and Comb. (In sense 3), as trolling-bait, -fly, -hook, -line, -rod, -spoon, -tackle; trolling motor U.S., a motor suitable for a boat used in trolling (see TROLL v. 13c); trolling pole N. Amer., a horizontal pole rigged on each side of a fishing boat in order to keep the lines clear of the propeller.
[too many examples]

The message board meaning does not appear to have reached the OED yet.

What an interesting usage of the word [i]trolling[/i].  I wonder which of these meanings was intended?

The action of the verb TROLL in its various senses.

[b]    I. 1.    a. Rolling, revolution.[/b]
c1440 [i]Promp. Parv.[/i] 503/1 Trollynge, or rollynge, volucio. 1613 DAY [i]Dyall[/i] v. (1614) 98 Concerning the Heavens they perceived such aequabilitie of motion, such turning and trolling of them.

[b]    b. ‘Rolling’ or ‘streaming’ in; abundant influx. [i]Obs.[/i][/b]
1614 T. ADAMS in Spurgeon [i]Treas. Dav.[/i] Ps. xiv. 1 Extortion batters in the usurer's affections by the trolling in of his moneys.

[b]    II. 2. Singing in the manner of a round, or in a jovial style; in quots. applied contemptuously to antiphonal singing.[/b]
1575 [i]Brieff Disc. Troubles Franckford[/i] (1846) 206 The trollinge and descantinge of the Psalmes. 1586 in Neal [i]Hist. Purit. [/i](1732) I. 480 The service of God is grievously abused by..ringing and trowling of psalms from one side of the Choir to another.

[b]    III. 3. [i]Angling.[/i] The action or practice of fishing by the methods described s.v. TROLL v. 13.[/b]
  But in [i]trolling-line[/i] (quot. 1888 in 4), app. confused with [i]trawling[/i]; cf. TRAWLING, TRAWL-NET, TROLLNET.
1651-7 T. BARKER [i]Art of Angling [/i](1820) 22 The manner of his trouling was with a hasell rod. 1682 [see TROLLER 2]. 1725 T. TAYLOR in [i]Portland Papers[/i] VI. (Hist. MSS. Comm.) 88 The late Duke..took great delight in that kind of fishing for them [pike] which is termed ‘trowling’. 1787 BEST [i]Angling[/i] (ed. 2) 43 The walking bait is that which the fisher attends to himself, and is called trowling. 1860 G. H. K. [i]Vac. Tour[/i]. 167 If you..will go and spin a butterfish for lythe,..you will there first discover what sport trolling can be. 1888 GOODE Amer. Fishes 62 In trolling from a boat at least 300 feet of line should be used. 1910 H. T. SHERINGHAM in [i]Encycl. Brit.[/i] II. 28/2 The use of the drop-minnow, which is trolling on a lesser scale.

[b]    4. [/b]attrib. and Comb. (In sense 3), [b]as[i] trolling-bait, -fly, -hook, -line, -rod, -spoon, -tackle[/i]; trolling motor [/b][i]U.S.[/i], a motor suitable for a boat used in trolling (see TROLL v. 13c); [b]trolling pole[/b][i] N. Amer.[/i], a horizontal pole rigged on each side of a fishing boat in order to keep the lines clear of the propeller.
[too many examples]

The message board meaning does not appear to have reached the OED yet.

nate

2006-07-10 09:00:17 pm

pretty sure it's just a pejorative extension of I.

Yoshi348

2006-07-10 10:21:10 pm

PAGE BREAKER

Ready and willing.

I heard it was based off of III, with the person "trolling" for flames.

arkarian

2006-07-10 10:35:24 pm

red chamber dream

Quote from Kratos:

no, no i didn't
Embarassed

Don't post here again until you read the rules, and I am not kidding.

One of my complaints is that this:

wishing for a gift
a gift of nevermore
for The Raven said it first
i pray to him for sin

makes no sense to me - at all. For one, "nevermore" is not a noun and shouldn't ever be used as one. Next, what does "The Raven" saying it first have to do with anything? And finally, what the heck does the last line even mean? It doesn't seem to fit with anything else you've said and could mean lots of things literally, as well. It's too ambiguous int he given context (and is probably too ambiguous in any context).

Kratos

2006-07-13 09:40:44 am

Quote from Izo:

You do realise that you're pointing out my flaws in this post, yeah?

Yea and how much of a doushe did i look like, point taken, yeah?

Quote from SABERinBLUE:

Dude,......shot.

I'm not trying to save the world ya know its just a hobby and an extension of myself.

Quote from Chanoire:

What an interesting usage of the word trolling. I wonder which of these meanings was intended?

I didn't exspect that to be a line of confusion, but nate is right. Although i like the thought that you can interpret it however you feel.

Quote from Arkarian:

makes no sense to me - at all.

Okay what am i supost to write on your brian wave? What do you think it means all you said is that it was "is probably too ambiguous in any context", does that mean you think it means nothing, then that is what it means. Also have you read "The Raven"?

Quote from SABERinBLUE:

Dude, you're trying to tell people how bad the world is with your poetry.

Replace "is" with "was" and your right.

[quote="Izo"]You do realise that you're pointing out my flaws in this post, yeah?[/quote]

Yea and how much of a doushe did i look like, point taken, yeah?

[quote="SABERinBLUE"]Dude,......shot.[/quote]

I'm not trying to save the world ya know its just a hobby and an extension of myself.

[quote="Chanoire"] What an interesting usage of the word trolling. I wonder which of these meanings was intended? [/quote]

I didn't exspect that to be a line of confusion, but nate is right. Although i like the thought that you can interpret it however you feel.

[quote="Arkarian"] makes no sense to [b]me[/b] - at all.[/quote]

Okay what am i supost to write on your brian wave? What do you think it means all you said is that it was "is probably too ambiguous in any context", does that mean you think it means nothing, then that is what it means. Also have you read "The Raven"?

[quote="SABERinBLUE"]Dude, you're trying to tell people how bad the world is with your poetry.[/quote]

Replace "is" with "was" and your right.

SABERinBLUE

2006-07-13 10:14:02 am

Cook of the Sea

Quote from Kratos:

I'm not trying to save the world ya know its just a hobby and an extension of myself.

Not saying anything else. No matter what, if you want people to understand what you're trying to say, you should spell stuff correctly.

Kratos

2006-07-13 10:16:46 am

Ya, Ya I know i was just pionting out that i didn't try that hard and it's not that important of a work, ya know.

SABERinBLUE

2006-07-13 10:18:38 am

Cook of the Sea

So why put up something on the internet that you didn't try very hard on? Why waste our time?

Kratos

2006-07-13 10:25:39 am

"Just post the poems, please." - Ark

I firgured i'd thow some thing together and post something good later, but i forgot them agian. :(

arkarian

2006-07-13 12:20:22 pm

red chamber dream

Quote from Kratos:

"Just post the poems, please." - Ark

I meant that you should stop talking about other, useless stuff that doesn't have to do with poetry and focus on the subject of the topic - your poems. We shouldn't need to hear about what's going on in your life to like or even just read your poetry. I didn't want you to rush and post a subpar poem.

Quote from Kratos:

Okay what am i supost to write on your brian wave? What do you think it means all you said is that it was "is probably too ambiguous in any context", does that mean you think it means nothing, then that is what it means. Also have you read "The Raven"?

It of course doesn't have to be catered specifically toward my understanding, but I get the feeling that no one knows what you're talking about.
>.< Yes, I have read "The Raven", and that poem makes perfect sense. Your allusion to it, however, seems quite out-of-the-blue and does not. Not just to me, to anyone.

Chanoire

2006-07-13 01:24:27 pm

Quote from Kratos:

Quote from Chanoire:

What an interesting usage of the word trolling. I wonder which of these meanings was intended?

I didn't exspect that to be a line of confusion

No, that was a line of sarcasm.

Quote from Kratos:

Quote from Izo:

You do realise that you're pointing out my flaws in this post, yeah?

Yea and how much of a doushe [sic] did i look like

Well, since you ask...

Kratos

2006-07-20 01:28:54 pm

I like ya'll, you guys put up a good agruement! Now on to the topic...

____________________________________________________

Circles on the ground
Squares in the sky
Lines through my arms
X’s on my eyes

Tens of thousands
Of men, all in a row
Marching in a line
Approaching a slaughter
For an evil reason
Unknown therefore corrupt
Endowed with a will
A permission to kill
Mercy free chambers

On her knees
Praying for forgiveness
Wishing for freedom
From this bastard
That will not leave her alone
He provides everything
She dreamed
Yet, nothing she wanted
Crying together, yet far apart

He swore to protect her
From all the pain
But in the end
All he did is amplify the misery
That she bore, when he wasn’t there
Even when he was!
He believed he sheltered her
But in reality
He killed her faster

Afraid to hurt them
They hide the truth
That they use the other
For there own warped ambition
When they are together they are “happy”
But when they are apart
They are galaxies apart
Cutting……… cutting away our pain
Gone………... from our leaking wounds

Honestly, I believe I’m worst off now
Putting up walling, then tearing others down
Applying regulations on my heart
With a lock n’ key
To prevent a relapse of my Affliction
Anger running rampart in my head
Nowhere to go but out
Reaper be tempted by my blade
But he shant see me soon
____________________________________________________
By the way Chanoire, I'm in a Sig! YEAH!

I like ya'll, you guys put up a good agruement! Now on to the topic...

____________________________________________________

Circles on the ground
Squares in the sky
Lines through my arms 
X’s on my eyes

Tens of thousands
Of men, all in a row
Marching in a line
Approaching a slaughter
For an evil reason
Unknown therefore corrupt
Endowed with a will
A permission to kill
Mercy free chambers

On her knees
Praying for forgiveness
Wishing for freedom
From this bastard
That will not leave her alone
He provides everything
She dreamed
Yet, nothing she wanted
Crying together, yet far apart

He swore to protect her
From all the pain
But in the end
All he did is amplify the misery
That she bore, when he wasn’t there
Even when he was!
He believed he sheltered her
But in reality
He killed her faster

Afraid to hurt them
They hide the truth
That they use the other
For there own warped ambition
When they are together they are “happy”
But when they are apart 
They are galaxies apart
Cutting……… cutting away our pain
Gone………... from our leaking wounds

Honestly, I believe I’m worst off now
Putting up walling, then tearing others down
Applying regulations on my heart
With a lock n’ key
To prevent a relapse of my Affliction
Anger running rampart in my head
Nowhere to go but out
Reaper be tempted by my blade
But he shant see me soon
____________________________________________________
By the way Chanoire, I'm in a Sig! YEAH!